automatica
screaming match:
the head
vs.
the erratic heartbeat
I’m telling you this for your own
benefit/good.I would show you
but I’m tired/misunderstood.I
can’t whisper effectively.I can’t/
can I flutter somewhere further away?
default volume:scolding tone
It’s cold still/in here.I should/
could/would keep rolling.Close
the curtains.Sun/Fire/Star/Porch-
light is too bright.Viscous eyes.
Oh, quiet.I’m thinking/sleeping/
concentrating on a steady life plan/raft.
thrumming & dumbing
down/down/down with nostalgic
notes.Unpredictable slips.Memory gaps/
relapse turns a mind inside-out/outside-
in/ where rosebud vessels burst.I told
you.I tried to.I warned you it would hurt.
November, 2017
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Thistle Thoughts 
Brilliant use of forward slash. For me it resonates since there’s times I don’t know for certain how I’m feeling or am intentionally being guarded in a response.
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Ooh I love that. Thank you for reading, Beth. 💚
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I recently started using automatic writing in my daily practice and what you’ve done here strikes the same chord. We get locked into a style, and feel as if that’s what’s expected of us.
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It’s true. All the me’s gather around the page at times & every one of them is trying to pen pain differently. Thank you for reading, Sun. 💜
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Really beautiful experimental poem! Its offbeat logic brings a different perspective! And it is powerful and disturbing in emotion!
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Thanks for reading!
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Most welcome!
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Excellent poem ! Well shared thank you 🙂🎉
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Thank you for reading
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Wonderful formatting!
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Thanks!
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