#OctPoWriMo 2021 — Day 20: “Funfair”

Funfair

dance around or dive in —
      this flavor of ocean
      extracts the better
      of us —

make it so subtle that it’s
      subliminal, barely
      there, a gossamer hint,
      a mirage

admit you almost saw it,
      almost felt a sting
      of a love arrow, kissed
      a wound & healed it,

tore open your chest
& exposed the emptiness

this whirl & twirl, this
      cyclone simulacrum,
      this oil & water mix,
      this dainty delusion

you’re a carnival ride
& I’m going to be sick

Photo by Timo from Pexels

Published by Jennifer Patino

trE says:

October 20, 2021 at 3:44 am

Yes to all of this, Jennifer! The imagery is incredible and the ending line is so powerful and perfect. I really love what you did with this poem.

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1. Jennifer Patino says:
  
  October 20, 2021 at 4:25 am
  
  Thanks so much, Tre! 🙏♥️
  
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  1. trE says:
    
    October 20, 2021 at 4:37 am
    
    You’re most welcome!
    
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Dominic Alapat says:

October 21, 2021 at 11:48 pm

This is a profound poem with a light manner! Your creative writing skills are absolutely top notch, and plain to see here! Loved this poem like a thrilling carnival ride! Wow!

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1. Jennifer Patino says:
  
  October 22, 2021 at 12:27 am
  
  Thank you
  
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  1. Dominic Alapat says:
    
    October 22, 2021 at 12:56 am
    
    Welcome.
    
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